Peer Review: Rough Draft

Read the two papers carefully(the files I uploaded). In separate response posts to each writer, answer the following questions with some detail:

What is the main idea of this paper? How clear is the thesis? Is it arguable? Focused?
What comments do you have on paragraph structure? Are topic sentences clear?
Why are paragraphs in the order they’re in? Is it clear? Where could it be clearer?
Comment on the research. Do the sources seem to pass the CRAAP test—are they credible sources? Is there fair representation of multiple points of view?
What is strongest about this paper?
What could use some more work?